Clouds swirled above the ramshackle building. All of the
vegetation stood back, away from the towering monster, quivering in the wind. A
crystal white shirt flopped, possessed, caught on a rock jutting out of the
crusty floor. Wilted, bony trees prodded all passers-by (not that there were many)
with their gnarled fingers, jeering. Shattered glass littered the courtyard. A
pungent aroma dissolved my nose. A solitary crow cawed.
This has such brilliant vocabulary. But to improve I'd say not to put in brackets, it ruins the effect of the description, but it is amazing the way you have described it!
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